IELTS WRITING: REPLACING PARKS & GARDENS [Agree or Disagree]

IELTS Writing Task 2: Replacing Parks and Gardens with Apartment Buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

 

TASK

 

Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent traveling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

A peaceful park captured by ©David Kubovsky

 

Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent traveling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

 

 

 

 

SAMPLE ESSAY

 

A number of people oppose the idea of converting parks and gardens near the main city into residential buildings for commuters, which is thought as the solution to minimize the workers’ commuting hours spent to get to work.  In my opinion, I agree with the opposing party as those places provide several benefits to people. 

 

LEXICAL RESOURCE

Convert [verb] – to change the form or function; change; transform

Residential [adj.] – designed for people to live in 

Oppose [verb] – disagree; resist 

 

A good reason why it is extremely important to keep parks and gardens that are close to the central part of the city is that they help minimize air pollution. Normally, the problem of air pollution is worse in most cities since major industries concentrate there. As a result, an excessive number of air pollutants that are emitted from factories or numerous cars make the air quality in cities poor. In that case, green spaces like parks and gardens are needed to act as greenhouse gases absorbers, thus, they reduce air pollution and save people from acquiring respiratory illnesses caused by those pollutants. 




 

LEXICAL RESOURCE

 

Pollutant [noun] – a substance like chemical that has undesirable effects 

Emit [verb] – discharge; send out; give off 

 

GRAMMAR

Amount vs. Number 

‘Amount’ is used for mass nouns or uncountable nouns (water, courage, etc.)

‘Number’ is used for count nouns. 

Since the word ‘pollutant’ is countable, we use ‘number’. i.e. A large number of pollutants. 

 

A Number vs. The Number

 

‘A number’ is followed by a plural verb, while ‘the number’ is followed by a singular verb.

 

Another point to consider is that retaining those places helps people relieve stress or anxiety. Studies show that spending at least thirty minutes exercising or meditating in green spaces or even strolling in the park or garden releases endorphins that improve mood and reduce stress or anxiety. In addition, those kinds of places provide a space for doing recreational activities such as having a picnic, taking photographs, and playing games, which are helpful in keeping one’s sanity. Having those places where people can do leisure activities and at the same time connect with nature certainly improves people’s overall health.

 

LEXICAL RESOURCE

Stroll [verb] – to walk in a relaxed way

Endorphin [noun] – a hormone that a person’s body produces that eases pain and can make him happy or calm

 





In conclusion, the idea of transforming parks and gardens into residential spaces must be objected to as they play an important role in people’s well-being, especially the city residents. 

 

LEXICAL RESOURCE

Transform [verb] – change 

Well-being [noun] – welfare; the state of being healthy and happy

 

 

DISCLAIMER: I got a band 9 in the speaking section, but not in writing. These days, I’m practicing hard to write better academic essays because I plan to take the IELTS academic exam either in October or November 2021. My goal is to get a band 9.0. Yes! Since I’m already preparing hard for the exam, I better aim for the stars!

So, now, I’m creating sample essays here on my website to simply document my journey in learning how to write better academic essays. You are free to read these sample essays and perhaps get ideas.

Let it be known that I’m not recommending anyone to copy my essay structure, my way of using the vocabulary, the paraphrasing, and to rely on my essays. Yes, I’m confident to say that you can trust me in the speaking section since I got a band 9, however, as for writing, like you, I’m still learning.

I’m just posting my sample essays to motivate you to prepare better as I do. I’m preparing for my exam and learning to the best of my ability. Feel free to leave a comment below. Let’s learn together. Let’s make our dream a reality. Yes, I strongly believe that we can do it! Practice is the key.

Cheers,

Julius

 

Please check another essay I made on DISCUSSING BOTH VIEWS AND GIVING OPINION about  PLANTS AND ANIMALS on this link https://ieltsdragon.com/ielts-writing-plants-and-animals-discussion-opinion/discuss-both-views-give-your-opinion/

 

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